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Old 02-04-2016, 01:11 PM
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I think the headline above each page should be much smaller, maybe 12-14 point, and you could drop "Section 42" from the headline since it is already there in the title. There's also too much vertical padding between things in general, maybe minimize that so that the reader has to scroll down less.

The art looks good, but page 3 is a little hard to follow since the captain's room is the same color as everywhere else and you cut there for just a single panel. It looks like security has walked into that room and that is what they see.

I'd say just keep plowing ahead instead of correcting it, but be mindful or cutting between different scenes that have a similar look in the future so that you can include instant visual clues.
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